I figure I am going to take it the one sentence at a time
method, though I find this tidbit of memory adorable.
First, I like the idea of generations of family. I don't
really have any great-anything in my family, so the idea of family at a
distance seems unfamiliar and interesting, especially when one considers the
connotations of family as familial closeness, bounded by blood.
There's always a possibility of addressing one as the head
of the table--a place of authority. How have you established this authority in
your family? I think this could tie in with what seems like a sort of grouping
thing happening at the end, as you past notes to your mom, therefore alienating
as well as condemning the others.
If the Thomaston balls are so famous, how come you've never
seen them? Just something that I think would, in a story, need a brief sentence
of elaboration.
I love the idea of using butter balls to quell the kids.
That is just great, expand on that. As well as this sort of mock intimacy with
the butter-ball smeared children and the dad, who has to put a napkin between
him and child.
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